DontStopBelieving

There are a lot of punctuation errors throughout these chapters, i would go back and read through your story. But I did love these chapters, they could be lengthened though. ...

OK, I don't have much to say. So here we go, I would let the story drag out more before he asks "Do you like me". I would want to ...

OK, first off this chapter is REALLY short. All in all the reader gets ingaged and wants to know more. In my opinion, I would separate what the characters say ...

Saying she surprisingly fell into a light and fitful sleep doesn't make much sense. For the most part, when you're upset, you don't sleep well, so it shouldn't have been ...

I loved this chapter, you have a good plot going so far. My advice is to not make it like every other teenage romance novel people have read, try and ...