Dono

Wow. I am awed at both the greatness of the story and at Snoinks critiquing prowess. Snoink your crazy. lol. Bravo to both of you. Jigsaw--this was your reaction to ...

The barbarian has no weapon of his own, either... Even though we come into the scene right in the middle of a fight, you should still fill us in, else ...

I agree with Snoink--character interaction is key--there are certain things you just can't get through with dialogue alone, such as tone... Otherwise, nice work. As usual, I'm a bit late ...