Dokidokirin

This was a really fun read. I felt a bit out of the loop at first- why is she walking and where is she headed? Who is she? Why is ...

Ah, curses! That cliff hanger! This is really amazing, and I see it's gotten a lot of responses so to be brief: My only beef with this is that the ...

- I hate surprises. No, I really do hate surprises. The last time someone surprised me I nearly killed them. I happened to be holding a large shovel at the ...

I’m no special girl, I’m shy and many people in my grade don’t know what to think of me. Sigh some would say I am pretty with my long wavy ...

There were a lot of things I wanted to point out, but I see that the above poster has already done so. I will say that the opening is a ...

It's called "Found." and it's fiction. I don’t understand the appeal of jeans. They’re so hard to run in, yet everybody wears them. I mean, there I was, running for ...

Thank you for the comments everyone. I see now that punctuation really does tie it together a bit more. I do prefer to have neat and tidy work, so thank ...

I agree that it's confusing in the sense that we're not sure who is speaking, why they're speaking, or who they are speaking to. I like that it begins as ...

Truly awesome poem. The part about cruelty in her pores really snagged me, and the line about the picture smashing into the wall. hat line came up so suddenly, it ...

Woah, a great poem. I loved the recurring week and movie idea. As the above person said: please keep writing. :D

Definitely a cute, funny poem. The idea is fantastic, but there are two things that really stick out. One is the inconsistent rhyming scheme, which as you read on becomes ...

I think the two poems combined works great. First it describes a girl, then she's being protected. It's very sweet. There are a few jarring lines here and there, such ...

There are definitely a few confusing bits in this poem. For starters, flowers clouding breath. Being a child and knowing of winters long past is also a tad confusing, (as ...

First off, this is a very very cute poem. Something you might see on a Christmas card. The only thing that sticks out is the "flicker lights" bit. I'm thinking ...

This was lovely- it has both the positive and the negative aspects of winter, first described as pretty and glittering, then as cold and, my favorite word you used, "attacking." ...