DisturbedDisorder

The comment before already took care of the spelling and grammatical errors, so I won't bother with that. Here's everything that I thought.... The stared to shake Drake dropped the ...

Hey! So, I guess I'll start with the negatives first, like the person before. Just like the person before said, the prologue reveals too much. Already I'm guessing that this ...

I'm reading the manga versions of the series, but maybe if the books are really good, I'll give them a try, too ^^

Another thing that I wrote because I was bored. Again, there is no chapter before or after it. I just kind of started in the middle of a story. Because ...

I kind of want to say Blue Moon from the Immortals series, but...yeah, I'll say that it is the worst. The first book in the series, Evermore, was amazing. I ...

Let me just start out by telling those of you who don't know who Nikki Sixx is. Nikki Sixx is the bassist of the band Motley Crue. If you don't ...

Like the two people before me said, I would pay attention to check it before you post it. It could even help to have someone else check it to make ...

This is just a short little thing that I wrote because I was bored. Don't worry, you aren't missing anything- this is all there is to this story. ______________________________________________________

Days passed and nothing too interesting happened. The window got fixed, I checked the newspaper every so often to see if anything that hinted a vampire was going on, but ...

You described her pain very well. It's a really sad story, but realistic and it makes me want to grab my older brother and give him a big hug (although ...

This chapter is really short and cuts off in a kind of awkward place. I would try adding more detail and even describe the characters. Right now I can't really ...

Hey guys... So, this is chapter two. Thanks to everyone who commented on the first. It seems what everyone thought was the biggest problem was that it was rushed, which ...

I slammed the stake into its chest, watching as it fell limp against the ground. I made sure it was completely dead, and then yanked my stake out of its ...