DisturbedDisorder

Hi There!~ This was such a touching and sad story, but it was good. The emotion was strong, and I like how you twisted it at the end to be ...

Hi There!~ Well, Lil_Pau took care of mostly everything, so I'll just skip to what I liked. ^.^ The emotion was really...sad in this poem. It was almost like you ...

Hi There!~ So, I first want to say that emotion of this story is strong. You can really feel the hurt. Even thought the emotion is strong, though, it doesn't ...

What if you could change your shape, Simply by command? Maybe you'd become a little crab, Crawling through the hot beach sand. Maybe you'd prefer to be a lion, It's ...

Hi There!~ It was actually really amazing...I'm not sure what else to say, which I know isn't helpful because people post stuff on here to get hints of things to ...

Hi There!~ The story seems a little fast moving, and I agree with the rhyming being forced. There was grammatical error, but I'm sure you can find that on your ...

Hey there~ I think it was good, and the meaning of the poem was really nice, but the flow seemed to be fragmented in a few places. It seemed almost ...

Hi there!~ I agree with both people who reviewed before me. Yes, the whole poem is generally "I did x," but don't worry, I have a problem with that with ...

Hi there!~ Hooray! for extended metaphors!! ^.^ Sorry, I love metaphors. But anyway, it was a good poem, and I think that comparing life to (what I'm pretty sure is) ...

Hi There!~ So, I think it was interesting poem, but I got a little lost at the part about the wings and the table...Maybe you could try explaining what's happening ...

Hi There!~ So first off, I loved how you italicized the words at the beginning of every stanza. I know other people already said that, but I wanted to make ...

Hey there~ This was really short and didn't really get into the feelings of undying love. Really all there was was a few metaphors, but no real feelings. It would ...

Hey there!~ Okay, so I'll start by saying that I loved it! The emotion was really strong and through the whole thing I was imagining like a broken hearted girl ...

Oh no, It wasn't supposed to be this way! What do I do when people ask of her? What am I supposed to say? Do I lie, And say that ...

Hey, So I have a couple of things to say. First (and this is probably just me), but I feel like your trying too hard to add details, especially in ...