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Thanks Areida, I really appreciate it

Thanks mate, I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

Thanks, Lava, I really appreciate it! I've gone back and made the changes. :)

I hope you continue with this, Quetseli, it's too good to end here. Best of luck!

Glad you enjoyed it, mate :D Thanks for the review!

Thanks for the review, mate, I really appreciate it. Your first comment about the sentence, very true, I'll go back and edit that tomorrow. Regarding the cursing, the reason why ...

Thanks, curious, I'm glad you liked it.

Woa! You really need to break this down, it's too much for anyone to read let alone digest. Work on the paragraphs so you can draw your readers in.

I really like this, i was sucked in instantly. you have some awesome descriptions, vivid but not lengthy, sometimes that's the best way to keep readers intrigued. I'm curious to ...

Thanks for the review. I knew the slang might be a bit annoying to some people but I'm hoping you can get used to it because I'm trying to reflect ...