Deus

No, not really. I repeat, no musical talent, no musical training, reading back over it, it needs to be ridiculously altered. thanks though, i am touched.

for the record, written for a laugh. i have no musical talent. as such, cannot write songs.

fine, keep on

There is a land that love forgot, A land where nothing seems to grow I look, into your emerald eyes, and I see, I see that thats the land you ...

Well... Well well well... Well well well well... Well well well well well... Its good. Make the twist more prominent. Otherwise, fine, well written, funny, well plotted.