Demoness

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Blind Love She is lying down on the floor so cold, her body's weak, her words untold. He is standing there, like an evil shade, watching her soul, slowly fade. ...

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First time i read it, i found it a bit confusing, and as somebody said change of persons... e or she.. But then i read what "LastPaladin" said, about it ...

Cant find anything i dont like about this Poem!! Absolutely amazing! Keep writing

Death takes it all On a lonely rock he sits alone from his lips comes a painful moan he's thinking, hate takes it all No words can tell what he ...

I really like this one. The rhymes easy flow, and even though the poem was short the story was fully told. Very good! Keep writing, and u should rhyme more ...

Mmh, yes... i always do writing mistakes.. i will look it over! x) Thanxx for replying though! And i will try change the long thing bit too.. but i always ...

Just another life At the beginning I was born and as the time passed i was torn Ripped appart to small pieces infected by thousand deceases And i was experiencing ...