Demoness

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What I never said You were always there beside me Even though I claimed I didn’t want you to be Always complained on your present But still always I on ...

Hm... yes, I'm pretty strict with rhymes and don't think of how the lines turn out sometimes... but i'm aware.. ;) Thanxx for the reply anyways // Hugs and Hearts ...

Aoow, how sweet, I liked it very much, though maybe the last line was a bit too long, maybe you could somehow split it up in two... otherwise, good work ...

Allthrough, I liked this poem, and the rhymes were very promising. Though as others said above, I never understood what it was all about, what "LIE" are you talking about ...

What you lived for We are all given a life Given to death And some are Brought back With a reviving breath We all wander knowing Not knowing Always searching ...

Thanku very much And Moo, i like getting advices but i would appricate if u mentioned something that was good aswell,

Well thanku Kyllorac for ALL the GOOD criticism... really nice and friendly, couldnt u atleast say one good thing instead of talking aout how ad it is for like etirnity, ...

Thanku very much Ikafe x)

Noo, i dont agree with "LastPaladin" Okay, it might have been a bit repeative-- But still, it doesnt have to be complicated to be a good poem, this was short ...

Aoow, this was aweesomly sweet

Ooh, Thanku.. i see my mistakes now, i get a little carried away when i write so i dont have time to think, but i will look it through Haha! ...

What he said to me He said "You can’t come If you’re not all willing" And he said to me "Don’t come" He said "You can’t speak to me If ...

When nothing else matters Have you ever cried so much you ran out of tears I have, an ocean of sorrows, pain and fears Have you ever screamt so much ...

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