Demoness

So I like where you're going with this! Like dolwright said, you've got a great outlay - you just need to create some order! Keep a pattern, like, sama sized ...

The words "abstract" is reappearing in these reviews above so I was thinking I was gonna come up with another words to describe your piece at the fully - But ...

This is just lovely! This poem is so vivid, and lively and imaginative and.. oh, just great! You use such great descriptive words and I just wanted to be there ...

Hey, this is really, wheely great! You're just sparkling with imagination and great description!!! I think the rythm and flow worked on okay but it could be better if you ...

Helli, Hellue, Demoness here! So, to begin with - I thought this was a quite interesting and amazing poem!! :D I like the structure of your stanzas and it's a ...

Darrn it, Looks like the rescue thing is over, Maya and Venom will leave the cave - but they won't give up on finding Silver :P

Okay, Hi, I'm Demoness! I think this piece has a great base, you've got some great ideas, and good lines and descriptive stuff. I do feel that it's a bit ...

Aoow, this is sweet! I like the topic, easy to relate to, we all have our dreams to chase and wish for! Great imagery too, but I don't like your ...

Neey, this is soo sad and depressing! But it's good though, that you make me feel these things - it means your poem is real and true and honest and ...

Haha, this was quite amazing! I love how everyone on this site seem to have just as undesipharable minds as I do :P Great imagery, great descriptions, great flow, rythm ...

Hmm... I was kind of confused when I read this but still quite amazed. You're words are so imaginative and descriptive that it was hard to keep track on what ...

Yeesh - Capitals dude! No, that was a boring beginning, let's start with, Hi, I'm Demoness and I like capitals! Here comes a review; Okay, so I like your idea, ...

Haha, this was original for one! I like it though, it's cool how you can use so much imagery and desciptive words and make something as simple as a grapefruit ...

Hello, We meet again! I like reviewing and reading your work, they're always very neat and there's never much picking appart to do. I always feel like I have to ...

I agree with what most other reviewers has already said! The main problem with this piece is the structure. You've got no proper stanzas, and your lines differ too much ...