Demetri

It's not actually supposed to tell you more about the character. As it's a one-shot, it's supposed to tell you only what's there, but I suppose I need to concentrate ...

Hello Snoink, This store is prose allegory, and I understand what you mean. I'll focus on the characterisation. Thank you or reviewing. (: Also, just out of curiosity, what 'style ...

She were fifteen, got a present in exchange for a bed to sleep in for the night, and she were done gone – in a couple of months, that is. ...

So I'm under the impression that the main aspect of the story are these groups of people - the Kynsar's - who have attempted and succeeded to rule the world. ...

I liked this. It was light-hearted, subtle, happy and somewhat fluent. It's not ground-breaking, and I don't think that's what you were aiming for, either, and it's not going to ...

I adore this. The imagery and the words you choose to describe it with are really original and interesting. I love how every part is a snapshot of something different ...

1. The teacup is spattered with broken roses, a thorn poking out of the chip in its shoulder. My mother raises it to her chapped lips and glances down at ...

I thought this piece was definitely acceptable, but its main, overall problem is the transition. We're told things, but we don't know why, and we don't know why we're supposed ...

What I dislike about this piece is the clichéd consistency of it, and its inability to convey any sort of emotional impact into the reader. This is because it's so ...

You're English! Mwahaha! We just pwned you. Kind of. Johnny Wilkinson is not a cool person. Plus, the BBC kept doing close-ups of him making this really weird expression. Well, ...

Hey Demetri! The name's Stella, welcome to YWS! A TWer, eh? I joined TW for a few days but something weird and technical went wrong with my account which put ...

i Your heart is so tied up caged behind a series of ivory; it makes me cringe to know I’m the same way. The introduction is weak. It lacks the ...

Hello Demetri :D Welcome to YWS! I'm Lydia, it's nice to meet you. *Shakes Hand* I haven't heard of before, I might have to check it out, but I hope ...

Good morning/afternoon/evening to you all, I'm Demetri. I come from TW (teenagewriters.com) and my curiosity got the better of me and I decided to join YWS. I digress in saying ...