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Hi, Circle! I don't think I've read anything by you before :) Wherever Thee be, Thou art shall be there; I was a bit confused by this. Doesn't "thou art" ...

Hi Wranna! Welcome to the YWS! :) Because I was crying, crying softly While you sang for one last time What does the "because" belong with? Because there's a reason, ...

Hi, Scarlett! I agree with the previous reviewer that this created a sort of peaceful mood. However, I'm not sure if that was your intention, with the hops and skips ...

Hi, Xreigon! I highly recommend giving this a some kind of title. If you don't like what you previously had, use it anyway and change it later -- you're much ...

Hi, Creativityrules! I must say I didn't like the repetition all that much. All the "shh"ing and "ing"ing actually made my head ache a little bit. I do like the ...

Hello Lumos! I think this poem was rather lovely. I liked the eyelashes, shoe laces, striped tie, a bakery in St. Louis and much more. It's lovely, but it's not ...

Hi there, Idraax, Flem, Gatherer, and Daughter! Wow, first off, let me say that I've never read a collaboration between more than two people! I was thinking to myself that ...

Hi there SmylinG! :) First off, let me say that I love the title of this "collection". I picked this one to read mostly because it had fewer comments than ...

Hi there, Storyweaver! Just flecks, spots - Lines, lines, lines. This feels much too abrupt. I liked the rhythm in the rest of the stanza, but the last lines are ...

Twit. Twiiiiit. Twit twit. I feel a surge of frustration. I can’t seem to win against these rules—they slip and slide in my grasp like a bar of soap. Usually, ...

Hi there, Joshua! Here as you requested :). I killed a lamb last week. I loooove this opening sentence. Love it. Creepy as it may be. You know you can’t ...

Hi Sionarama! Finally, eh? “Peter Pan was always fickle. You would never know what he would do next. That just added to the excitement, the attraction, I suppose. He had ...

Hi there, Horus! Sorry for keeping you waiting for so long. :o There probably won’t be much point behind it, but I presume that it might evoke some feelings in ...

Hi Gal! Here I finally am, sorry for being so slow. That ... I I really like the rhythm and the rhymes of this stanza. It seems to flow off ...

Hello, Kagi! Finally! The disgust that framed, almost glowed in every neighbour as they walked by me killed my mother. Framed what? It's a nice word, but if you're not ...