Demeter

lakes ABC (hahaha) The first letter must be first.

Hello Teri and welcome! Don't worry about feeling like a bad writer, I'm sure you're not and besides, this is the best place to get help to develop as a ...

The title was the thing that got me here, but this was over before I even noticed. And unfortunately that's not a good thing. I actually liked it at first, ...

This is a good example of the "show, don't tell" factor. It's hard to break, I know, but I think some other people would say it, too. I kind of ...

Something is knocking the window - it's just a branch missing its tree. Somewhere a light flashes - it's just a car missing its map reader. Something lurks under the ...

I was amazed when I had read two stanzas and was going down for more. But then it just stopped. So I suggest you write at least one more stanza ...

Okay... here's the review I promised. :) Wow! This seemed more mature than your other poems that I've read, so that's a very good thing. The rhyming worked well except ...

Thanks for your comments - yes, I know the translation's rather poor and you don't really get the idea of it if you don't know Finnish. I actually don't know ...

Hey, I noticed you changed the title! I like it better now :) Wish you luck!

You really have to check your grammar, there were disturbing mistakes all around this poem. Like "in him I am scared" - you just can't say like that! Capitalize the ...

I was going to review an other poem when I saw your title and thought, "I have to go read that one!!" I liked this. Especially the line "I hate ...

Oooh... I actually liked this! My first thought was "Oh no, butterflies, this can't be good" but it was! It's simple, not many words in it, but still it's satisfying. ...

Okay... first of all, the subject isn't very up-to-date, is it? There were also a couple of typos. And I think you should leave space between a comma and a ...

Hmm... It's somehow hard to give any reviews for this, but I'll try my best. You could delete that "right?" completely, it just is there, sitting in the corner and ...

I liked this, although there were a few things disturbing me. "Jailer" doesn't sound like a real world, of course this may be the whole point, but still, I think ...