Demeter

Oh wow. Really. So beautiful. I'm not bothered with the repetition, in fact I like to do it myself, too. But I must say I had to laugh at Vernon's ...

You sure have a lot of feelings of this kind in your poems. The problem is, it makes them very much similar to each other. But I know poetry is ...

Hmm... Where's the flow? Okay, the lack of the flow didn't really bother me too much. I just had to say it. To me, the word "basically" sounded somewhat sharp ...

Yep, the structure was a bit confusing but since you admit this yourself, I wouldn't be so bothered about it. Hmm... What else could I say? Well, it was long. ...

To me, it was a bit too telling. Usually, that doesn't bother me, but now I got somehow uncomfortable. Could have been because of the subject, of course. But I ...

"Watching as you trip And tumble along your trip." While reading this, I couldn't help a little smile because of the "rhyme". I don't know what it was supposed to ...

Hmm... I really don't read this kind of poetry, so I don't know what to expect. I found your lining a little weird, like in this: "I had forsaken innocence, ...

Aww... That was really beautiful. I'm sure the girl you wrote this for (if there is one) is all flattered now :) "Be my sunshine For you already are My ...

Hi Jasmine! I love your name. One of my friends is called Jasmin without an e. I also just read a book "Midnight" where there's a character named Jasmine. Yep, ...

Once there was a monster who spoke only about bubble gum. He thought that he should take a lesson about bubbles and rubber bands. He could jump over the river ...

E, are you stressing about school? :D Since you wrote "Exam Blues" as well! Oh well. Forget about that. You have this certain writing style that makes it really hard ...

I got a little confused as there was good rhyming in the last stanza and in the other ones not really anything. I feel the same way about the third ...

You know what? I actually kind of agree with you, sometimes ;) This has nice rhyming, by the way, though it wasn't very much of a poem in that way. ...

Hey gangsta, wassup? :'D That was so gangsta! Okay, now you made me say that all the time, you freakin' gangsta. Okay, I'll stop. Now. You know why? 'Cuz I'm ...

Hmm... It's actually kind of sweet. I somehow liked this. :) But there are a couple of things. First, you must capitalize your "i"s in parts like "am i too ...