Demeter

Hi! Typing, typing just typing. This was nice, but add a comma after the second typing. Do the same in all the "typing, typing" bits. I type to stop the ...

Hi! I noticed there weren't any crits yet so I decided to give it a try. Lies, all lies, Everything in this world Is a lie. I didn't feel this ...

Hey Nats! My name's Demeter and I'm nice. Haha. Yeah, posting off your own work can be a little scary, but I've almost gotten used to it by now. :) ...

First of all, I think it's great that you've got the music, too! This is the first song with music I've read here. Though I have to say that the ...

I hope I can be of any help, I haven't reviewed many lyrics here yet. You aren't seen Although this is grammatically correct (right?), it sounded awkward to me. Could ...

Hi. I picked this one to read because I saw there were none reviews yet. So first of all, you truly, madly, desperately need to divide this into clear, readable ...

I'm afraid that I have somehow upset Satin. Her thoughts don't seem very calm, as far as I've ever seen anyone's thoughts. I'm well aware that she decided to hate ...

Hi and welcome! I'd like to know the secret of your username, too :) It's hard to write and incredibly hard to pronounce. No can do, though. You seem to ...

Hey Daniel! I loved your entrée. It just made me laugh (which is really something as I usually don't laugh when I'm by myself)! Especially that dog part. I learnt ...

Hi Amal! You've got the same name than the girl in Does My Head Look Big In This! haha :) It's nice. So, I'm Demeter and I'd like to welcome ...

Welcome, Megan! I love your name! It's the name of the main character in my first novel, though, unfortunately, the novel itself turned out to be pretty bad. :) But ...

That was funny. And yeah, I guess this could be radio material. But just to let you know, I'm not maybe the best person to review this since I never ...

Hi Andy! That sounds great. I like to write novels, too; I've written two so far. But I very much disliked the first one. I'm posting the second one here ...

Run, Forrest – I mean, Lauren –, run! And welcome to YWS. There are a lot of Laurens here already :) I love everything you mentioned there, too! I've played ...

Okay, hi. I haven't reviewed many lyrics here, but I'll try my best. I agree with Jamie on the repetition thing, but then again pop songs do that a lot. ...