Demeter

Sweet poem. Though I would've liked to read more, this was a little too short. You have nice ideas; why not use all of them? By expanding, this would make ...

This was fresh and fun to read, but it doesn't really remind me of a poem. The ending was great, though; reading it felt like taking a deep breath after ...

"So lovely to see ya again!" Misty shrieks as she and JK rush upstairs. "I love your top! You have new lip gloss? Love it." I reward her with a ...

Aaah, I adored this. There's nothing I love like weirdness. (Okay, almost nothing.) You deserve a star from this. Though I don't know how much this is of a poem, ...

I read your poem "Dear Mr. Writer" before this one, and I love their satirical appearance. I hope I had written them myself :) Also, feel special when you hear ...

Hello! One thing that caught my eye was the article before "mercy". It really shouldn't be there, should it? Of course, I may be wrong, but I have a feeling ...

The title caught my eye immediately; a little prince or princess lives in everyone of us! Did you know? That you are a princess Too pretty for princes And to ...

Hello and welcome! First of all, like Paw said, chat talk isn't allowed here at YWS. So... Great avatar, by the way! I love Audrey Hepburn! What sort of stuff ...

Yo Josh! *waves back* I'm Demeter. I think you're going to like it here. That is, at least if you like to write! What kind of stuff you write? Poems, ...

The reader can really identify with the girl, I think. You've written this well. Sometimes I feel incomplete. Often, it feels like a big chunk of my world broke off ...

No "*"'s in a story. Write the whole word or, if it's too harsh, use an another one. There were also a fair lot or spelling mistakes, like proceded --> ...

Hello! I picked this piece to read when I saw it was about POTO. I'm a great fan myself so I decided to give it a try. The grammar was ...

This was very fun to read. I like your style. And, you're exactly one month older than me! Isn't it great? :) I don't really find anything to critique (and ...

A hit in the face for everyone in YWS! A nice evasion of "I've had enough of all your boring work!" :) Great one, E. So you want to be ...

Hello. I agree with Eimear on the fact that the structure could and should be better. People can't see where a stanza ends and another one begins. However, the flow ...