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Re: Second Best
Hello, BloodSunset! Unfortunately this left me feeling the same than bubblewrapped. I think it would better to have a short but touching, moving and deep poem, than to have a ...
Jun 20, 2008 -
Re: Pencil
Hey kittykat! Yeah, I think the Narrative Poetry would be the one. After all, you're telling a story. This was a little random, I have to say. The stanzas aren't ...
Jun 20, 2008 -
Re: Worthless..?
Hey, complexion! This wasn't bad at all. Maybe one of your first poems? It was a little emo, but that's alright. Though, leave my body to rot into nothing. For ...
Jun 20, 2008 -
Re: Hello!
Hey Feliza! Pretty name! So is it like "Eliza" but only with F? :D My name is Demeter/D/Dem/Demi etc. Luckily it's not my real name, though. Haha. So, welcome to ...
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Re: The Other Side
Hey, star! I liked your rhyming and lining – in most parts. He scampers up the hill. The sun, no comma here is shining bright. Joyfully, he this line (and ...
Jun 19, 2008 -
Re: Goodbye, Paradise
Hey, niteowl! The idea is great; it sure touches everyone (well, almost everyone) and I'm no exception. We sang and danced to cheesy pop songs because we believed In here, ...
Jun 19, 2008 -
Re: There.
Hello Stella! I couldn't quite get the story, but never mind. The poem itself was really beautiful. You say that you're no poet, but at least you're poetic person... does ...
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Re: Job Interview
Hey, Maya! I haven't seen you around in a while! I think the basic idea was actually very nice, I only felt that the job interview thing was too self-evident ...
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Re: The Blanket Covers
Hello, Nolan! I think this has quite the potential to become a great piece. I have a few nit-picks, however. So many lives taken; Not one smile. So many souls ...
Jun 19, 2008 -
Re: Hello, all!
Heyz Spiritree! Welcome to YWS. It's a great place. And we're all nice and friendly, so you shouldn't feel lost at any point, haha :D What genre do you write? ...
Jun 19, 2008 -
Re: I'mnew.
Hey Lane, Welcome to YWS! They call me Demeter. Well, some of them do. Some of them call me by most interesting nicknames. Oh, by the way, I have to ...
Jun 19, 2008 -
Re: Greetings
Hey Pingu-slash-Liam, I absolutely adore both username and real name. That cartoon was awesome! Oh, I'm sorry. I didn't introduce myself at all. Okay, my name is Demeter, and because ...
Jun 19, 2008 -
Re: Heeeeyyyy
Hey Sarah, Welcome to YWS! I'm Demeter or D or Dem(i) or Meter. I know a few Sarahs, it's a great name! :) Wow, publishing process?! You mean like real, ...
Jun 19, 2008 -
Re: Interested?
Hey, elements! Welcome to YWS! Don't worry about some people's (like mine) young age, there are lots of 18 years and up people here. "Adventures in NY" :D Sounds great! ...
Jun 19, 2008 -
Re: hey dere
Hi, Spikey! Hehe, I invented you a nickname :) Welcome to YWS! What's it like to live in India? I've never been there, must be exotic. So what genres do ...
Jun 19, 2008
