Demeter

Hi, clueless! I really like how the first and the last line bring it all together. The emotion in this piece is enjoyable, and I think you could expand the ...

Hello, Tusker! There's really something about this. I like the main idea, and your imagery is sweet, as well. The second stanza is good, but I don't think the rhyming ...

Hey, Sarah :) You do have a point there. It's sad how people often call the loudest, the prettiest, the thinnest, and the most wanted girls popular, even though some ...

Hello, Samantha. This is beautiful. Such a lot of emotion. I like the pondering, I like the length, because it shows you own this subject, and you have lots of ...

Hi, Mackenzie! Welcome to YWS! Hope you like it here :) First off, a few things to remind you. YWS is a writers' site, so please try to remember to ...

Hi, my fellow young writer! Ah ha ha. Aren't I so funny? :D Welcome to YWS, I've seen you around for the past few days. It's great that you're already ...

Wow, kris! It's really great. And I absolutely have to say that I adore the ending. It shows no one's perfect and really, the fear of telling the thing just ...

Hi again! Oh no, it's the last chapter :( You need to write more soon, pretty please? I promise to keep writing mine if you keep writing yours :) I ...

Hi, Sarah! I liked this chapter! And I like Douglas already, can't wait to find out more about him. I felt all the groggy misery I was too groggy These ...

Hi, bisquit! Personally, I love nonsense poems. This was entertaining as well, but I just want to say that it wasn't quite a poem, not with that kind of structure. ...

Hi, gaylegoh! I liked this much. I feel all calm now, after reading your poem. It has a very soothing effect :) he knew then of our need. Hmm. I ...

Hello, happybear! I liked this very much. It has the usual "raw" feeling that shows it's your first poem, but it didn't really matter. This was way better than my ...

Moi :) Okei, mä nyt kirjotan kuitenkin in english, että muutkin tajuaa ;) Okay, so I think you should rethink about the punctuation. As you can see, it's all just ...

Hi! Help! I always feel so weird when there's a big jump in time :) Two years later and I still had not received any news or word of him ...

Hi again ;) Hmm. One thing I didn't quite get was that all the people suddenly "hate" Amelia. Why? Is it because her mom doesn't remember who she is? If ...