DelanieHeart

This girl is Fire and I am Ice, She radiates warmth- and I cold to entice. This confused me. How do you cold to entice? She melts my heart- I ...

If I had nine hearts Would it push me to love? Would it make me bear the gifts This sentence feels awkward here and seems too long. He sends me ...

No august prophet could have augured, Nor honest author could have portrayed, Love! The plangent sky that morning rang, The plagal tone those mourners sang. Hmm. Plangent and plagal are ...

Deep down inside they have not a heart This fell heavy when I read it aloud Their eyes pierce at me like frozen darts Pierce at me is just grammatically ...

Thanks. I do admit that the first chapter was strained. This one came so much more easy :) I love pretty colors and I'm kind of ignoring when they said ...

Hehehe, yeah, thanks for the review. I'll definetly consider your rhyming words (why didn't I think of google!) I don't know what you mean by the "everyday" being there though. ...

Hehe, thanks. I reread the poem and you're write. Better change that to something that rhymes with "laughter"... Hmm, what could possibly rhyme. Here are several suggestions; I'll let my ...

Thanks for the review, most of what you said was very truthful. I disagree with your first statement. She is nothing like me. I have become greatly attached to Delanie, ...

Okay. That sounds like a good idea. BTW Delanie has a crush on Will, if you didn't see my new edit on her. I'm not very good at creating male ...

~~3~~ ~~Intruders~~ Delanie slid under the bed, shying as far away from the door as she could. There was no way she was going to die and there was no ...

~~2~~ ~~The Trouble in Aleogra~~ Delanie groaned as she felt herself being shaken from her sleep. Her mother always woke her up at ungodly hours and Delanie felt like she ...

Hehe, I'm glad you liked it ;) I don't cut, I never have but I used to involve myself in self-harm, not being specific for you ;) I know a ...

Oh glad you changed the last bit :) It sounds better now. You're a great poet! Keep it up :)

Hehe, thanks :) I'm glad there are such things as reviewers. I was like screw it when people said I needed more emotion but it is a lot better now! ...

Wow. As I read this the emotions just jumped out at me. This poems seems to be my life story, about cutting and all. My favorite line is this: My ...