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Re: Heart of Ice
Her bones are glass her heart is ice Comma after glass she cannot bear to live her life she can smile she can breathe Comma after smile why's she not ...
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Re: A possible friend
You don't say it directly but we get your point, It's all about you, it's not about us. We want to be friends, but you won't allow that. We're missing ...
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Re: Invisible tears
Wow. I read this and was like, where's the rest of the poem. I like the start you have but no poem can be 3 lines long, that's barely even ...
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Re: 5 Poems That Start With "S" - Shoes
Shoes Oh how many different types of shoes there are! Comma after the "oh" They house your feet and cover your feet. The two "your feet" disrupt flow They can ...
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Re: I am the Apple
I am like an apple Yay! Simile :) and you a knife. You slide into me carefully, placing yourself delicately in me. This sounds awkward. Change up the words or ...
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Re: The last time: (May contain refrence to death)
Cold blade, warm vein, executing the pain. No more after this, at last I promise. Hopefully, this will be the one that finishes me. Too long, it disrupts the clean ...
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Re: # PO3M #
1,2,3 Is what I say when we are alone and I look at you Loooong Up and up He says he lets me choose 1,2,3 Is how high you count ...
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Re: Rejection
You stare at me My friend, your friends; As I walk alone. Don’t blink though The "though" seems awkward there As you might miss The helplessness in my eyes, The ...
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Re: To Cheat Death
Death is such a one-sided argument. We have no say, no choice in when to go. To live is to die and to die is to live. Cliche. When one ...
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Re: Be mine
Deep in my heart I'm concealing things, that I'm longing to say; Scared to confess what I'm feeling, frightened you'll slip away. I always wonder what you’re thinking, When I ...
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Re: Sanctuary
Take me to sanctuary, Where my peaceful soul lies, No more heavy burdens-- Or trouble filled eyes. "Trouble filled" doesn't flow together as nicely as the previous lines This heaven ...
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Re: Dynamic Delanie's Review Shop {Open!}
Willing To Review: -- Fantasy Fiction -- Fan Fiction -- Sci-Fi Fiction -- Poetry ^.^ -- Historical Fiction -- Romantic Ficion (Under 18!) -- General Fiction Will Consider: -- Non-Fiction ...
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Re: Quick lil Jick fanfic
Erm... This is disturbing. Are Nick and Joe like... brothers? Okay, I guess I better review it then other than the fact that the characters in this story totally grossed ...
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Re: House of Murder
Yes, yes! Post on this wonderful storybook, Unun. Post, my precccious ^.^
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Re: A Night To Treasure
As they lay here thinking and looking at each other Searching for words buried under covers These words don't rhyme as perfectly as they should... But ha, the covers is ...
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