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Re: The Clearest Vision
Thank you :) Yeah, I don't really like metaphors :) Being blunt is tough love and that's what I've learned. Anyways, thanks again!
Jul 12, 2011 -
Re: The Clearest Vision
Yeah. Kinda. Well, not entirely. I don't cutcut, I just know what it feels like to be so alone and feel so empty and things like that. Thanks, that's one ...
Jun 8, 2011 -
Re: The Clearest Vision
Thansk :) I worked really hard on finding the write words for it. sure comes in handy - or else I'd never know what contused meant! Anyways, thanks. I'm glad ...
Jun 6, 2011 -
Re: The Clearest Vision
The Clearest Vision When I look at myself In the cracked mirror of my heart I can see the fragments Of heartbreak and pain And of a very lost girl ...
Jun 6, 2011 -
Re: Demon Dancer
Miraculous hands cut the strings That bound her in a dance not her own. The song was silenced that demons sing Strings and sing doesn't rhyme and this part just ...
May 31, 2011 -
Re: I See Myself
SporkPunk: Your comments about the poem are appreciated and however you feel about it, this poem was just to satiate some of the feelings I've been having. I admit I ...
May 31, 2011 -
Re: How'd you discover YWS?
Who's Pat Buchanana or wahtever?
May 30, 2011 -
Re: I See Myself
When I look at myself In the cracked mirror of my heart I can see the fragments Of heartbreak and pain And of a very lost girl With no direction ...
May 30, 2011 -
Re: House of Murder
Due to unfortunate RL events I will not be as active as I'd like, therefore I have to drop my obligations to this SB. Sorry :(
Mar 16, 2011 -
Re: "F" = Failure
My stomach is turning, spinning very fast. The "very" in this line ruins the flow. Perhaps choose a more advanced word My head is pounding, like a bomb about to ...
Mar 10, 2011 -
Re: Self-Actualization
First things first before I begin my review. It's unusual and not encouraged to left your font, putting it at such a small size too. It makes it a pain ...
Mar 10, 2011 -
Re: Love To Be.
And i'd like to believe that this love will be. Capitlize the "I" in I'd and put a comma after "be" instead of a period So you can sing sweet ...
Mar 10, 2011 -
Re: The Short Second Life of Bree Tanner
Thanks :) I don't use punctuaction in my poetry, but I guess it's time to start... Do you need puncuation? Anyways, your review helped and I reread the things you ...
Mar 10, 2011 -
Re: The Six String
A village with no music is empty The gloom of no known expression is here No known is hard to say and it disrupts the flow Alas a device was ...
Mar 10, 2011 -
Re: A Light Where There is Darkness
A golden lining on a black sun is a special occasion marveled at by many. This is my favorite stanza you did and I like it. The poem is very ...
Mar 10, 2011
