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  • Thank you :) Yeah, I don't really like metaphors :) Being blunt is tough love and that's what I've learned. Anyways, thanks again!

    Jul 12, 2011


  • Yeah. Kinda. Well, not entirely. I don't cutcut, I just know what it feels like to be so alone and feel so empty and things like that. Thanks, that's one ...

    Jun 8, 2011


  • Thansk :) I worked really hard on finding the write words for it. sure comes in handy - or else I'd never know what contused meant! Anyways, thanks. I'm glad ...

    Jun 6, 2011


  • The Clearest Vision When I look at myself In the cracked mirror of my heart I can see the fragments Of heartbreak and pain And of a very lost girl ...

    Jun 6, 2011

  • Narrative Poetry
    Re: Demon Dancer

    Miraculous hands cut the strings That bound her in a dance not her own. The song was silenced that demons sing Strings and sing doesn't rhyme and this part just ...

    May 31, 2011

  • Lyric Poetry
    Re: I See Myself

    SporkPunk: Your comments about the poem are appreciated and however you feel about it, this poem was just to satiate some of the feelings I've been having. I admit I ...

    May 31, 2011


  • Who's Pat Buchanana or wahtever?

    May 30, 2011

  • Lyric Poetry
    Re: I See Myself

    When I look at myself In the cracked mirror of my heart I can see the fragments Of heartbreak and pain And of a very lost girl With no direction ...

    May 30, 2011


  • Due to unfortunate RL events I will not be as active as I'd like, therefore I have to drop my obligations to this SB. Sorry :(

    Mar 16, 2011

  • Dramatic Poetry
    Re: "F" = Failure

    My stomach is turning, spinning very fast. The "very" in this line ruins the flow. Perhaps choose a more advanced word My head is pounding, like a bomb about to ...

    Mar 10, 2011

  • Dramatic Poetry
    Re: Self-Actualization

    First things first before I begin my review. It's unusual and not encouraged to left your font, putting it at such a small size too. It makes it a pain ...

    Mar 10, 2011

  • Other Poetry
    Re: Love To Be.

    And i'd like to believe that this love will be. Capitlize the "I" in I'd and put a comma after "be" instead of a period So you can sing sweet ...

    Mar 10, 2011


  • Thanks :) I don't use punctuaction in my poetry, but I guess it's time to start... Do you need puncuation? Anyways, your review helped and I reread the things you ...

    Mar 10, 2011

  • Narrative Poetry
    Re: The Six String

    A village with no music is empty The gloom of no known expression is here No known is hard to say and it disrupts the flow Alas a device was ...

    Mar 9, 2011


  • A golden lining on a black sun is a special occasion marveled at by many. This is my favorite stanza you did and I like it. The poem is very ...

    Mar 9, 2011


“And how shall I think of you?' He considered a moment and then laughed. 'Think of me with my nose in a book!”
— Susanna Clarke, Jonathan Strange & Mr Norrell