Deifyance

Hey, awesome story. My only problem is that it is a bit rushed. I heard once that if its boring to you its boring to the reader. Try and spice ...

Third Day and SonicFlood FTW

I have been folloing this series closely. All I have to say is Blilliant!!!! More! More!

good job! looks like everyone already got everything haha. I just noticed the last sentence. The turned to my with a bloody muzzle and growled. He leaped and as his ...

Gah...hurry and get the next chapter out already! Im hooked.

This....Is....AMAZING! I thought it was wonderful, write the next one fast! I couldn't find any errors except the = instead of the ' Awesome job, please P.M. me the link ...

Ahhh, another masterpeice.....sorta. I personally loved the chapter. I won't do the grammer because looks like Haruno got em all. So i'll go on content. First- I like how you ...

OK. I tryed my hardest to read, but there was so many grammar and other errors that i had to look away. I like your first paragraph though, it got ...

It's a real challenge for the people who like complicated stories. I think you should keep going and don't stop, I really liked it. Good Luck

WOw, okay im a fan. I love these stories. The plot so far is inticing and it is pretty original in its own way. Very well written. Will be watching ...

Ok, thank you all. I agree with most of your posts. I happen to be in love with the repeating thing right now, I have no idea why. I wrote ...

Thanks for reading. :D Like to see both good and bad crits. Please leave the teardowns (spelling tear or tare or whatever.) on your own computer. teardown= no structural critizism, ...

I liked it, very unoriginal idea. We need more of those. :D Good job, looks like Kiss got it all. But I did see one thing: They were huge and ...

Yeah, it was pretty good. I would suggest splitting the dates up. And there where a few grammer errors, too. Fix 'em and it'll be pretty good.

Wow, nice work. Welcome to YWS, I like this peice, not only because im a avide christian, but I can see a whole novel branching from it. Very nice idea. ...