Deifyance

Very nicely written. and coming from an extremely Christian boy I have to say that those May not be Christians whom you described. The World has given Christians a bad ...

Goodness! you make my prologue look like a 3rd grade simple sentence book. It was very well written and produces a moderate amount of suspense. The cliffhanger was not cliche ...

Good idea. I have a feeling this is going to be along the lines of Matrix? One thing. If the creature is talking, how is it's mouth sewed shut? and ...

Wow. very nice. I'm deeply impressed. Grammar is not my strong suit so I'll stick to content. Good: The characters. You told us right away what kind of person the ...

WoW. I just finished Misery by SK and you for some reason reminded me of that book. Which is good. Okay, I stink at grammar so I'll stick to content. ...

Hey, I have a question. Did you purposely name the "Special Forces" after the popular USA Propaganda film Red Dawn? I also feel that, like in the real military system, ...

I don't agree with Kiss on this one....I believe that since this guy is to lonely and actually has a imaginary friend, that this is just another pleasant surprise to ...

One word...... Hell YEAH .... finally some real action on the pages of good ole' YWS. Yoyu made my day. Awesome integration of fantasy and modern or sci fi which ...

Awesome story! good job. Content was awesome, looks like a perfect or close to perfect start to a nice nasty plot. Only thing is watch out for that detail. Lots ...

Hey! Good Job! My only thing is you might want to expand a bit in the prologue. That sounded (At least to me) like you just slapped it together. I ...

Very Nice..... just make sure to have someone besides yourself proofread it. I found a few small mistakes such as ot instead of to. All in all.... Content was amazing, ...

The spacing here was better but not enough. Notice that you change paragraphs after someone is done talking. Wrong: "Blah blah blah" Said guy number1. "Blah blah blah" said guy ...

Very nice, just make sure to start a new paragraph every 5 to 6 sentences.

I agree with almost everyone above me. The first chapter was enough, but this seals it. Im hooked. I love how you can put together all the little peices and ...

Hey, im interested in these kinds of novels... just finished Corsair by Clive Clussler. I do hope you continue this, just add a tidy bit more detail and you'll be ...