DeeBee

Hey! Could you please review a couple poems of mine? work.php?id=95324 and.. work.php?id=85788 Thank you!

“Stop,” a deep voice rumbled in the darkness. My heart jumped inside my ribcage and I came to a quick halt; that is a voice that I will never forget. ...

Hey, and welcome to YWS!!! I'm a newbie around here too, so it will take a little getting used to, but you'll love it here. :) First off, I'm going ...

Hey there! First off I'm gonna say that I really liked this piece. It flowed well with some good descriptions and I could understand for the most part what was ...

Hey! So, I'm going to start off with the things that I don't really get or know what's going on. I loved the whole piece but there were a few ...

The soft click of a pistol behind me, the pistol, met my ears with a whispered promise. Everything around me; the autumn leaves falling to the ground, the desperate voices ...

I really loved this piece! It's got a great storyline, so far as I can tell, and a lot of interesting characters. The conversation is very lively and quick, which ...

I really like your writing in this piece. The different images that you use to describe what you felt really gives the reader a better idea of who you are. ...

Sometimes memories can be a curse... Sometimes a blessing... Reminding me of the moments in my life when I had hit rock bottom Pushed so close to the edge I ...

First of all, might I just say that I am ridiculously impressed. It's a very short piece but you manage to turn it into a beautiful, very dramatic and moving ...

Hey! So, some things that I liked and didn't like. What I liked was how much feeling you put into this piece, you could definitely feel the emotion that just ...

So I really liked this poem. It's short, but very powerful with kind-of a haunting darkness that blurs the whole thing through. A lot of emotion and it's all described ...

I lay there for hours my fingers mindlessly tugging at the grass the sun warming my back my breath escaping shallowly from my lips the dandelions gently brushing against my ...

So, first of all, I'm gonna say that I really like it! I love the way you describe things, both the physical part of the people in the story, and ...

Whether it be driving the frightened soldier toward his almost certain death, Whether it be intertwining the love of the couple swaying to it, Whether it be calming the tortured ...