DeathAngelRuby

i hate you too

i hate you Comma after 'ache'. The final three lines (starting with 'life was never good for her') does not flow as well as the begining. Also, what's with the ...

Next time, try posting something that makes some sense, if you can. - Firestarter

It all started with heart ache who knew it would come to this A sad day... a sad awakening Next was the misery the deep depression She was lost, and ...

just becuz you don't like the style of the writing !!!!!!!!!!!!!!! This was an overall good intention but...the ending made it sort of tacky. Ofour has already mentioned your spelling ...

Beyond The Sun of Day ~~~ Deamonds open out of of their cadges All creatures great and small come out of the dark burrows they once knew, see the sunlight.. ...

Come Out ~~~ Your eyes like slits trying to close for centrys Hidding from your shadow to petrifyed to look behind Your mind full of journeys but afraid to show ...