Deanie

It probably won't take too long I haven't really been able to do much :/

Thank you Blue! I will be working on making it all more childlike, seriously, that's the hardest thing about writing it. I was worried it would get a bit confusing, ...

Thank you Iggy

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Thank you :) I do really need help when it comes to style and the flow of writing - many of my previous reviews focused on characters and plot and ...

Thanks very much Timmy! I will work on what you said with the dialogue. And thanks for reminding me I have to be fake-American mode when I write this xD ...

Thanks for the review, your highness

So the daily reviewing hasn't worked... but I can't leave a review on this chapter because I don't see a thing to change :D Deanie x

Thank you so much for the amazing review! Really, it's super helpful. I will be working on all the points you mentioned, and I'm glad it has gotten better to ...

I'll go read it and see

Thanks Iggsies ^^

Hehe you make me happy! I can tell you when more is posted if you like ^^

Glad you like it! :D