Deanie

Oh man this is so helpful. I am going to try working harder on my dialogue really, and punctuation has never been my, uh, strongest point xD So it is ...

I think this makes more sense if you put it with Eyes Wide Shut at the end of the whole story...

This has been declared awesome.

You don't have to make a new one every time you know ;) You can find one synonym you really like and always use it!

Quote in a quote? That was purely accidental O.o

Thanks sis

Yes, all the trains happened at once. I will mention it somewhere in there when I edit and work on scenery more! Thanks

Ah, thank you Iggy! Right, I have to edit it so Boyle is calling Aoi mom seeing as that would make more sense... Also, whenever my characters get injuries I ...

Thank you again! Thanks for catching me out on the whole American-British thing... sometimes it's hard to remember the difference xD

Ah you're wonderful Shady. Thank you for this

Thank you for those suggestions! I will include them in my edits :)

Your reviews always make me laugh you know xD Yes Avril is totally craxy... And the Aoi disappearance shall be explained in future chapters... don't worry :D

Thank you so so much for this! Will work on the setting!

Thank you! I will try working more on the mourning of them all. Also, you've got the ages right, except I was drawing Avril along the lines of 15. I ...