Danny

Hi! I like the lightness of this. It's fun and sounds good. I like the use of the word peace. But I think the last two lines need some tweaking. ...

Hi! So I don't like that you used the '...' It gives a false sense ofthe word scream. And I'm curious why you capitalized 'The World' But what's really good ...

Hi! Well, while I like the premise of this, I think there's too much of 'een' endings which doesn't sound good when you read the poem as a whole. How ...

Hi! I like the quirky nature of the poem. It's interesting and I like how you have used dialogue. The rhythm you maintain is very good, but there are places ...

Hi! I don't think I've ever read a poem on this topic but this is cool. I like how you started and rhyme is pretty good. But the flow sort ...

Hi! I like the simplicity but you're not telling us a story or creating an image in our heads. You're stating what happened. But why not tell us the emotions ...

Hi! I like the poem a lot. It gives a nice creepy image. But I do have some comments. Why are the last two lines of the first para that ...

Hi! I like how you centered the poem. It sounds nice to read that way. But I think that each one will have a different version of 'dream place' and ...

Hi! I like that you added the workings of God into this. It's interesting. But I think there can be more imagery to this. And the way it's written, I'm ...

Hi I like this! I recently posted a haiku too over here. I'm not very good at science, but I did enjoy this. So, why is nitrogen booming? I'm sure ...