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"It was huge, black as night, with wicked-looking ivory claws longer than my arm." I'd suggest arms , but I suppose that's fine. "When the tail passed over the dragon’s ...

"I was one of the few in my grade who was socially awkward; I had few friends, despite our school’s small community (thus everyone knowing most everyone ells)." *Else. "What ...

Well, I have to say...for a first novel, an opening at that, it is very compelling. I've noticed some missing periods (there should always be an end to a sentence), ...

Wow. This is quite nice, very interesting and engaging. And, even if I'd like to see more of this world, I can tell it has ended--just as Crux's life did. ...

"The ciity was so silent, you could hear the wind. Something that was never before possible. Not here." You accidentally used two i's . "I walked across the rooftop to ...

Well, this was pretty good--nice and fool (which means cool, if you weren't aware). I liked the premise and all, but I agree with the person above--the guy should have ...

This chapter, while short, made a bit more sense than the last (no POV shift) and I quite like it. I've learned a bit more and things are going a ...

This was rather short as far as chapters go and it doesn't seem to match up with the Prologue. I'm not sure whether this is past or future (I'm assuming ...

It was very nice! Unique and it kept me captivated long enough for me to read the whole Prologue, when I have trouble sticking with reading anything at once (I ...

I liked it. But if this story was based in reality I'd probably be that one girl (or not)...and I'd slam the door in his face. Of course, I'm also ...

Generally this is pretty cool; and the fact you kept my attention even though I normally don't like "other world" or "other god" stories. There are a few things I ...

I agree with the person above on those few things. This book is really rockin' so far, though. I'm enjoying it. It's more so like a book than just randomness ...

I would like to mention I know NOTHING about poetry. I think it was pretty neat how you showed math in that way, however. Luckily, it wasn't as depressing as ...

Pretty interesting. I like the ideal of it all, but the characters seemed past shell-shocked, maybe sociopathic. Of, at least, that's how it seems to me. Try to add a ...

Okay, this is curious enough. It makes me think of Greek mythology, like that one lady/person/thing who was cursed to live on an island alone for eternity. But, you have ...