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Well, this was pretty interesting. I have two nitpicks, though. I know I don't know how the rest of it reads, but, yeah. You use a lot of summary dialogue. ...

Okay, so this story was pretty good. Actually, I quite liked it. It was gut-wrenching and depressing, however--so I half don't like it, as well. But that's me. I'm depressed ...

First off, this is an epic piece. Seriously. It's written very differently and very creatively, rather with the poetic flair of "The Sight"--but different. And now I will hack it ...

Okay, I must say this is beautifully written. Your description after the flashback is quite well done. Otherwise, I liked the title and I got drawn in almost automatically, which ...

*is sitting on edge of seat* Okay, first off let me tell you this--awesome prologue. Mine are normally ten times longer. I didn't notice much wrong with the grammar except ...

Well, I do like it. It paints a nice picture and delves slightly, but I think it needs more...heart? Like maybe it shouldn't have ended so quickly? It's the end ...

Okay, so it's starting out good. The girl isn't perfect and the guy seems caring. Fawesome. And neither of them are whining constantly. You deserve a gold star. Now, onto ...

So, I'll start off by first saying the title and the description got me curious. Now I'll cut to the chase and say I review by finding issues first, then ...

So, it seems like going from the reviews this was a longer story. Oh, well. I'll help you with what's left, I suppose. Now, I must say this was interesting. ...

I think this is a good article. It is concise and to the point; as well as structured. Your spelling skills are also very good. However, you don't spend much ...

I noticed a few spelling errors. At first, you had 'al' rather than 'all'. Later on, you put 'alright'. The proper form is 'all right'. Otherwise, the story was curious ...

This is...interesting. Not sure if I have a better word, but it's interesting. The storyline is different in its own way I suppose (shadows are feared in most stories and ...

"Well, it wasn’t quite a uni-brow, but I’d always taken the mickey out of him for it anyway." Eh? I don't know what that means. I like the atmosphere of ...

I've caught a few mistakes: "The black of her uniform stood in contrast to the white boots and gloves that seemed to glove against her pale skin." ...Glove? "They killed ...

So, I'm going to go through and edit, and then give you my opinion. While the reviewer above me has most of it down, I thought I'd go through and ...