CsJ93

Hey, thanks for reading and commenting on it. I will deffinatly work on flow better. I'm so bad at proof reading! I started this peice in 2009 and I didn't ...

This really blew my mind. Once again you have done a great job! This was really creepy and scary, in a good way though. It was kind of gross too ...

I think your imagery was AMAZING! It sounded as if you were writing a poem and not a story. It was Fantastic. I'm really interested in seeing where this story ...

It's starting to get really really interesting! There were a few grammer and spelling errors but I'm guessing you were just writing really fast, because that's what happens to me. ...

I love your title CinderAllen. It's really cute! Keep on coming with these chapters!

This was great! I can't wait to read the next chapter!

He held a part of my hair in his long fingers and let it slide through them. “Your hair is getting so long.” I ran a hand through my long ...

I could not believe what I was seeing as i gazed into his crystal blue eyes. Water filling my lungs, I froze. His pleads for me to keep swimming only ...

hey man! way cool beginning. I think you could go a lot of different ways with this story. I'm excited to read the rest of it! I'm guessing your going ...

When i first started reading this I was like wow he was in a bad mood...but then you turned it into something really beautiful and true. The anger part was ...

Ok you read this out loud to me and it was still really amazing! but reading it and being able to reread certain stanzas and stuff just made it so ...

i thought this poem was awesome! Great job! I've never read a poem like this before. it was very interesting and neat. keep it up!