Crysi

I really like it. The only thing I'd suggest is that you work on line breaks. Just play with them a little more. And play with capitalization - I think ...

Please use spell check, rodent. ;) I'm in love with this trilogy! I've read the first book, and I'm halfway through the second, although I haven't had time to read ...

Betrayal. ~Saphirus Passion. ~Crystalia Fleeting flirtation. Do I get bonus points for alliteration? Ooh, and there's a quick rhyme for all you ladies. *winks* ~Jehklar Have you ever been caught ...

*sigh* I was afraid this would happen... Sorry, guys. *MOVED to Debate and Serious Discussion*

Chinadoll, the first rule in debate is don't make generalizations . Okay, maybe it's not the FIRST rule... But it's definitely an important one, especially here! I've had three English ...

Well.. My only concern is that it's all setup and no real conflict. While it's the first book of five, it also needs to have its own story and be ...

I think of an Irish redhead, very loyal, very fierce. She's secretly fascinated with magic, but she's a tough girl who doesn't let on to such things, except perhaps with ...

The kind that comes on women's bodies. *winks* ~Jehklar (I tried to stop him, I really did...) The kind that comes as a gift. It always tastes better when it's ...

Hey, now, that's no way to go about it! Come on, chin up! I'll review it! You just have to have patience, dear one. :) This was an interesting chapter... ...

If this is the flashback you were referring to after you posted Chapter 1, I'd like to congratulate you on fitting this in very nicely. Your chapters are short, so ...

I liked it, although you stole a line from Pirates. ;) I was sort of confused on the Raven's form, however... I know she's half-elven, and perhaps you described her ...

*laughs* This just completely made my day. Honestly. It's very cute, you have a nice rhyme scheme going on, and the best part: you know how to keep rhythm! The ...

*chokes* NaNoWriMo2k7??? I was hoping I wouldn't have to think about it until, you know, September or so. I've had a lame idea stuck in my head for a few ...

Hmm... That's interesting, but I'm not sure I like where you've ended the first book. What's Dara's goal? What's her main conflict? I highly suggest looking at the snowflake method ...

Night. ~Saphirus Dawn. Everything's so fresh then! ~Crystalia Do you prefer showers or baths?