Crysi

I agree with Dono. (Thanks for the list -- it helps out a lot!) Also, he and I were talking earlier, and we realized that Kev's original group hasn't eaten ...

Q: What does Bessie the emo cow say? A: Emooooooooooo! Welcome. ;)

Day 1. 4:48pm. Joanna. Jo stayed by Adara. She had sat down next to her -- or, rather, had collapsed while trying to sit down. She closed her eyes tightly ...

Crysi maneuvered the new customized fighter out of the hangar, delighted at its sensitivity. It was always strange flying something new, but the controls were smooth and had just the ...

Sam, I had a running joke throughout my entire novel last year having to do with eggplants. I think it started on one of the sleep-deprived nights, where I was ...

Day 1. 4:27pm. Joanna. Jo forced a polite smile at Elaina's stupid comment, not really caring if it looked more mocking than sincere. Her glare followed the girl as she ...

Just wanted to point out: "Lily" is spelled with two "el's", not three. (I'm using "el" instead of "l" due to the confusion between "el's" and "eye's", if you get ...

TN, you can still PM people. Chatroom isn't the only form of communication available to you. This is the fun part! *grins* As for the Alain idea, I think it'd ...

Just to add my two cents on the ending -- I think it's fine as is. Telling more would be redundant and just bog down the story, taking away the ...

Wow. I really like this. Maybe this is just how I'm reading it, but I feel all the mentions of "I" are like pointing inward, saying to herself, "Has it ...

Actually, I like the effect the last stanza has. Yes, the second-to-last stanza is powerful, but maybe too powerful an ending. The last stanza softens it, and goes back to ...

I agree with Suzi. If you're having a long dialogue between characters, then use tags for the first few lines, then drop them. If they speak in alternating patterns, there ...

She rejects the morning after, the sun no friend to her. All that is left to her opens faltering eyes: an empty bed, empty bottle, empty sinking in the pit ...

Oh no... :( That's... I can't believe it.

Day 1. 4:19pm. Joanna. Jo watched everyone else disappear into the store, leaving her to guard the door. She had difficulty swallowing her paranoia, knowing her reflexes were sluggish at ...