Crow29

I have to say, regardless of whether this is technically a story or not, I liked this just as it was. It's the descriptions. As soon as I read the ...

Whoa, need to get it together after that one. To be honest, this piece is demented. And that's what I love about it! It has no form, no real rules, ...

567ajt makes a good case, but I completely disagree. I think the narration absolutely makes this story. It's like reading someone's thought processes as they try to form a story. ...

Well, where to start. Your style of writing continues to astound me. It's more like being inside Jo's head than a spectator, which really gets you into the story. I ...

Hello again. Good to see this story's going well. Your style works even better here than in chapter one. The way you blend reality and thought is, if nothing else, ...

Well where to start. What a piece! I can't believe no-one has reviewed it yet. I loved all the descriptions you've used at the beginning during Joy's nightmare. I had ...

Hello... Can I just say thank you for entering this competition. We've been waiting a while for someone to do so! Anyway, your character. Particle is a good idea, and ...

Wow. That is how to write a poem. For something so short, that really packs a punch. I would be the first to point out that I know absolutely squit ...

Yo. :D To begin, I thought this was a pretty good piece. It was a bit difficult to follow in places (namely, not starting a new paragraph for each new ...

Hi, hope you're well etc, not that I care :D On with the review my friend! This is actually pretty good. I like the way you've thrown the reader straight ...

This is a good piece. The tension is definitely there, and you give a good twist with the zombie hoard swarming the children's park. Everything seemed to fit into place- ...

Well, I feel rather feeble writing after the praise you just got, but really I would just like to say that this was an excellent piece. The opening sentences were ...