Critical_Point

I like your characters very much. They have personality and it shows in their speech. What I think you need next is a few more descriptions. How are they feeling? ...

I have to say that I really like your story. You have a good beginning here and I will definitely continue reading. You do need to clarify Lily's death though. ...

This is my first real piece of writing (at least my first piece that doesn't deserve to be immediatly destroyed). Please review!!! Taran The horse's warm back beneath me was ...

I think that this is getting repetitive. I agree with the others about the grammer and title, those definitively need some touch ups. I love your caracter! It shows that ...

I think that your writing is very good. I agree with Seraph though that it needs more details. What did the caracters look like? What was the setting like? How ...

Hi! My name is Laura and I found this site on google. I love to read and I have found that writing is just as much fun. One of my ...