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What about someone who is wounded and trapped? Ex: someone tied up and bleeding.

Zanna, I have to say that I really like your story. It has a lot of potential, I really think that you can go somewhere with this. The characters are ...

Nice. I must say that I've always pictured Death as a woman, but I can see how that could work. If you're going to show Death that way it makes ...

Here's chapter five. Please comment! -Point Taran Painful memories rushed through my mind. Things that I had tried to ignore surfaced. The shock of finally understanding that the brother I ...

Hey TheWriters! The story is still really good but some things could be better. Nit Picks "This is it. We're leaving Renasin." Arthur sighed. Arya turned and kept walking. Arthur ...

Hey Irish. I loved the story. It has got a great and very unique plot line. The setting was well described which is something most people can be a little ...

Hey The Writers! I just wanted to say that I really like your story. Still there are a few things that I think could be clarified. The war. The King ...

Dallin, scout I finally retired to my tent after what had been an unusual day. The haul through the woods had been tiring and finding the girl had come as ...

Hey there ScarletteRose! I've got a couple things that need clarifying. I'll leave the shredding to someone else. -Firstly what about this stalker. Is he important or not? One minute ...

Hey, I just Wanted to say that this is a very good beginning and that you should definitly contiue. Still, there is room for improvement. - For starters you should ...

Taran I watched them leave the tent and decided that I would have to trust them for the time being. But before I could feel safe with them I would ...

TeamJake1326, I like the prologue. It's short yet attention grabbing. Still I do have a few problems with it. “I’m gonna kill him,” Who exactly is he? Should we know ...

Zanna, Your story is very captivating and well written. I like the caracters but I think that you should give more details on how they are feeling. Also You should ...

Dallin, Scout The men and I tiptoed softly through the forest. We had been sent out by the captain to locate the wolves' den. The wolves had been wrecking our ...

Your story is very good so far although there are a few things that I don't understand. For example when she killed her family did she really think that they ...