CreepDan

Hi Freak! I'm Creep!

Actually, I spelled "childe" correctly, it means young knight. I spelled it this way to convey that I am new to the writing craft.

I have to ask, is that username a reference to Coheed and Cambria?

Oh please Mr. Editor, Make me your whore! Changes? Fine! I wasn’t really attached to that line Anyway! Sure, it was essential to What I was trying to do, To ...

I just got done reviewing a poem saying that it needed more punctuation, but I feel this poem needs less of it. The reason for her anguish, the cross that ...

I'd suggest adding more imagery to this. You mention the violence, but what is going on? Why exactly are the families grieving? Be specific. Families grieve for many reasons, ranging ...

I've gone with "they created for me four imaginary relationships that I can recall." Thanks for the help.

Just to clarify, are you confused about what the first two imaginary partners were? As in, the ones before Spooner? I want to clarify this so I can fix it. ...

I’ve never been good with the ladies. I could befriend them, but getting girlfriends was another story. In fact, I’d say most of my relationships were imaginary. Oh hell, they ...

One thing that I'm not a fan of in poetry is going in and out from rhyming to free-verse. I can appreciate both, but when the author fluctuates between one ...

My only criticism is to change the word "Hoover" to "Hover," unless you meant to talk about the vacuums/the President. Other than that, I enjoyed this piece.

The word "because" really gets to me in the first one. It seems to mess up the rhythm set up by the first sentence. As for the second one, which ...

Hey, I'm Dan. Just wanted to say hi before I start reading.