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  • Novel / Chapter » Action / Adventure, General Re: Fire On Water: Chapter One (edited)

    Hey, giving this a look while I wait for you to consider continuing the other project (the one with Maria and Michael). I actually found this moving too fast. I ...

    Dec 23, 2009
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Marked

    Not really much constructive criticism here. Your writing is wonderful, very concise and straight-to-the-point, yet not too simple. It has the right balance of detail and suspense, and goddammit I ...

    Dec 22, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Last Shred of Hope

    This was a nice piece, well-written and portrayed the lady's emotions pretty well. A few of the sentences felt odd to me, particularly the second paragraph. I think you should ...

    Dec 22, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Most Beautiful Girl in the World

    Hey there. Your piece is very well-written; free of grammatical and spelling errors for the most part, and those that I did spot have already been pointed out by other ...

    Dec 22, 2009


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