Confused.pirate

Huh this is very interesting! I like how it's different from other stories I've read. The fact that the doctor dies leaves plenty of mystery to what the baby did ...

Huh this is very interesting! I like how it's different from other stories I've read. The fact that the doctor dies leaves plenty of mystery to what the baby did ...

“You’re not fulfilling your orders, Silenda,” a cold, smooth voiced hissed in my ear. “I’m doing the best I can, master,” I stood silently in the center of a dark ...

I like this! I enjoyed the concept and the message. Sounds like it could actually be made into a song if you word it right and have a smooth rhyme ...

This is interesting, and I think you're on the brink of something really meaningful. Try and explore the concepts you mention, such as the smile you got in the hallway. ...

“Ugh Gia, what do I do?!” I was in the Hufflepuff common room, pacing back and forth in front of the fireplace, completely baffled that I had ended up in ...

Hello! I'm Sara and I will be reviewing your story today :) First, with the grammar/structure etc: All of Joy’s clothes were soaked and she could feel some of them ...

Potions 5 Charms 5 Herbology 4 Transfigurations 4 History of Magic… My Herbology and Transfigurations classes had been switched just like I had asked, which was fine because I wasn’t ...

I really really like this, actually sounds like a poem I would have to analyze in my AP history class :) Very good job with the flow and diction, and ...

“So Trista, how’s that Transfigurations paper going?” I was walking with Gia a few days after I had the terrifying dream/message from the Dark Lord, trying to figure out how ...

I froze and stumbled around for the right words, “Uh..um…er…well..” “Well?” Cedric questioned expectantly. What was I supposed to say? Voldemort told me so? Lucky guess? Come on Trista, th

“Please make sure you have a five page written paper about the effects of improper wand use when attempting to transfigure live objects. By Friday,” Professor McGonagall quickly explained as ...

Hmm this is good :) The proportions are realistic and even, might want to smooth out some of the details next time like around the face and such. Good job ...

I woke up the next morning to the sound of other girls preparing for the day. As I started to put on my robes, I remembered last night after dinner. ...

Never in my life did I dream about being in a situation like this. Cedric’s dead. Voldemort’s controls my life. My parents are brainwashed devoted Death Eaters. My future isn’t ...