Confused.pirate

This is all around a cute and enjoyable story :) I love how it's short and sweet. Only a few tiny little mistakes: My mind jerked back to the ti ...

Thanks! and trust me, I would have totally added more to the story if I was allowed to. But beings as I was supposed to give more information and only ...

Thanks so much! :)

I had to write this for my english class...I had to write about an exploration and discover, not final thoughts and truths. We had to write about an event in ...

This part has shown your improvement immensely since your last few chapters! I clutched onto my stomach as lay on my bed. The obnoxious butterflies [s]in my stomach[/s] wouldn't let ...

I'll be short here, because I honestly couldn't find much to critique on. I really like the story, it's pretty unique in a way. I really enjoyed the flashbacks. It ...

I enjoyed this part :) I'm going to be pretty general with my corrections this time and leave the grammar corrections to someone else, because most of my critique is ...

Finally! A story that's short yet a good start :) Usually they're extremely lengthy, and start to be a bore throughout, but I think you ended the first part at ...

I'm about to write a story about two people in love, and I really needed some pointers for my first romance story because I didn't want there to be anything ...

I love these! My favorite one is the stoplights :)

the dialogue part helped :) thanks!

I personally think that the story needs a bit more emotion behind Aspasia, even though we understand the face that she hates her mom and she's completely miserable, I think ...

Hey I'm Sara! :) I like it. It's not the best, but I think that you definitely have a good start to this. I personally think if you're going to ...

Hey I'm Sara! lol I've been writing for quite some time now, but I'm going to start a semi-serious story very soon once i finish one I'm working on at ...

I love the fact that I can make anything up, and when other people read it, they get lost in my world. I love the fact that I can have ...