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Re: Sydney (A quickwrite)
Hola! Wow, I really liked this. I really felt all the emotion in it. Anyway, for the review: Alright, Syd, I think, Just pee. It’s easy. And it’ll be negative. ...
Apr 30, 2010 -
Re: The Notebook
Hi, uh... Honey? Can I call you Honey? Okay, well I will. This was a sweet little romance story. There are some nitpicks, though. Like Embee said, the first paragraph ...
Apr 27, 2010 -
Re: All Around Me
I love this song! Anyway, I agree with the others that Chelsea's holy experience was unconvincing. It just kind of jumped out of nowhere. Also, I understand that you're probably ...
Apr 24, 2010 -
Re: Stain on the Sidewalk *Re-edited!!*
Hi, Isha. I'm Karma. This was a really sad and touching piece. I loved it. A few nitpicks first: The others all stared at me, two guys and three girls. ...
Apr 23, 2010 -
Re: Zero to Hero
Hi, just stopping in for a quick review! This is a really interesting idea! Was there any specific reason for writing it? Anyway, some pointers. Playing the guitar to his ...
Apr 20, 2010 -
Re: Their Secret Lives: edited
Oh boy. Oh boy. I'm not gonna lie... This is problematic. This needs help. This needs the services of... The Rambo Reviewer! :smt068 :smt072 (Why yes, that is him fighting ...
Apr 19, 2010 -
Re: The Bullet Grazed Her Heart pt.2
Hi again. You were fast posting another part, I like that. :) Anyway, onwards to the review ---> -That was some beautiful description during the dream! The "I love you's" ...
Apr 19, 2010 -
Re: The Bullet Grazed Her Heart pt.1
Hey, this was great! I really loved the writing, and it had some beautiful writing. I'd love to read more. A couple problems--> "...we can still be friends," a pathetic ...
Apr 18, 2010 -
Re: Sore Lips
Hi, Forestqueen, I'm Karma, and I shall be reviewing this today. I really liked this. It had beautiful writing, and all the characters were really well fleshed out and realistic. ...
Apr 14, 2010 -
Re: Untitled chapter 1
Hi, I'm Karma, and I'll be reviewing this today! There were a lot of little grammar mistakes so I'm going to quote the whole story and make my comments in ...
Apr 6, 2010 -
Re: Surprise Sideswipe!
Alright. This is awesome . Yeah, I don't know what to say except I really liked it. I liked the mix of first and second person, and the end line ...
Mar 27, 2010 -
Re: Cold Bitter Air (pt.1 of 5)
Hey, I'm Karma. This was a very good piece, and I thought you had vivid descriptions. I loved it, and can't wait for more. There was one problem here: Without ...
Mar 26, 2010 -
Re: Indescretions [Chapter One]
Hey Ecrivain! I'm Karma, and I'll be you're reviewer today. First, you should probably get a rating on this. It might attract more readers if they know what they're getting ...
Mar 25, 2010 -
Re: The Secret Goldfish
Hi Inkwell. I'm Karma. This story was... well, actually, it was amazing. I loved it so much. The beginning confused me of course, but everything cleared up by the end. ...
Mar 22, 2010 -
Re: (New Book) The Other Side
Hi Nike! I'm Karma. You have a lot of little grammar issues here, especially in dialogue, but since Evi already suggested a guide for that, I'll focus on the big ...
Mar 21, 2010
