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thanks ^^

If loves' wings had been torn apart, And had fallen to the ground, Our life would be over, And we'd live with the pain of not knowing, And the denial ...

-nods- yeah I'll try to dream up new stuff or sumthin' thanks guys

thanks guys! ^^ always good to here some advice/complements.. :p

^^ thanks for the advice i'll look around to making a 2nd draft or somthin' :]

All I feel is pain and agony, And it seems just yesterday I felt truly happy. If I die alone before this morning, Please let my soul find someone; somewhere. ...

I loved it! It's very simple and straight to the point at hand. This is written very powerful and just a slap in the face ending. (good thing.. : P) ...

Extremely long.. >.< but very good. I really enojoyed it. Nothing much to review on it though. But over-all the characters were vivid and I could relate. The chars. names ...

It's kind of jumbled and scattered. I enjoyed the beginning but like some have said already.. You could expand it with a few more stanzas. It's kind of choppy and ...

Thanks for the advice so far : ]

One day.. Gone far away.. Gone too far.. Falling.. Flailing.. Catching.. Holding.. Never know the truth Nor the lies.. Feeling or pain.. Sorrow nor glee.. Losing it all.. On one ...

Really liked it, It went at a nice fast pace that was easy to follow. Some grammar but that's mostly gone over so i'll leave you to your work. Wish ...

It was great so far.. didn't get through all of it.. but i'm really curious whats going to happen next. Really enjoyed the first few paragraph/prologue Lots of names though, ...

I liked it.. there were some errors but mostly all right. The second stanza was just "Wow", Captialize those i's other than that it was a pretty decent poem. Good ...

Nice job. Kinda spacey but I really enjoyed the ending, It was a good first one though.. a little dull but it just needs some visuals and your good to ...