Cloud_Stepping

Nice symbolism you definatly aimmed, fired and scored. I really enjoyed the fact that nature and pleasant things dominated the poem and the constrast of war being dropped in at ...

Yeah sorry i agree with liz and miya.There is just no feelings your left with at the end of every line or even stanza that trully digs down to the ...

Your sweet sounds get me by. They're what makes me feel alive, and for those blue eyes ill always try. You shed a tear and my blood runs dry. I ...

I like... its very nice poem you paint a clear picture of the house for me...small brown house with a black door and black spear like rails outside, it sits ...

Really enjoyed this poem....nice length in the sentences leaves perfect room for internal rhymes which you have 2 or 3 of and also adds drama to the line "the father ...

i really enjoyed it very nice comparrison i thought about you being abused by men and the cliffs being abused by the sea...well atleast thats what i got from it....i ...

I relaly enjoyed this epic poem some parts were harder to read than others such as "After minutes of rest, the strength he did make, To take a deep breath ...

nice poem but i think you caqn hide the true meaning more and make it slightly more poetic in doing so such as record sales and talk of money leads ...

no problem but you will notice that i said "as the forest so twisted and dark seemed to pose the perfect home" meaning while i was in the forest i ...

thanks for your opinion :-) and yeah some may need more work ill consider it but as for making metaphores obvious, no way i feel even when reading other poems ...

nice poem really liked the "like hatchling dragon not taking the bait" painting the nice picture of getting frustrated and angry with people but not losing your cool...well atleast thats ...

also "the living dont mix with the dead must be a screw lose in the head" is metaphorical for the people that excel and the people left behind is a ...

"Why dont you let me fill my cup" meaning let me drink whatever i want whenever i want...and the line that folows "i need to hang my brain up tonight" ...

the forest is symbolic of a bad state of mind and the line saying "as the forest seemed to pose the perfect home" meaning how we can get caught up ...

Float Away Hello there formiliar midnight breeze Filling me with passion comfort and eaze Ill walk outside eyes shut and try forget the streetlights and cars If you promise to ...