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Re: Figure me, trigger me
Overall I found the poem very rigid, not much flow to it and there was not much imagery to carry the poem, it seems very text book as if you ...
Apr 8, 2007 -
Re: De Faoite
Bang Bang Bang, Every step you take shoots fear down, There is invisible net, no one tries to leave this town They wanna tell you, you were born without wings ...
Apr 5, 2007 -
Re: Narrow Minded
Thanks Colleen but i think we have very different taste in poems.I'm not into structure or listing from a book rhyme schemes when writing a poem. I simply write and ...
Apr 3, 2007 -
Re: Withdrawn
Really like the image of some times i find myself secluded amongst the crowd thoughts taking over my mind, of times I once had Its very to the point which ...
Apr 3, 2007 -
Re: More Than Dust
Really nice poem, short sweet and good questions asked.I think they are all question you need to answer yourself in yours life before you can find the will to express ...
Apr 3, 2007 -
Re: Lets Invade...(insert country here)
Watch the single man marching band lead us all to ruin. No one Else's notes get in his head, he just hears his own tune. Surrounded by the smiles of ...
Apr 3, 2007 -
Re: Run Rabbit
I really enjoed this poem it is quick and easy to read and actually kind of left me a bit in despair at the end of the poem but thats ...
Apr 3, 2007 -
Re: Eclipse
Pretty short...i assume you were going for effect. it definatly does give an effect being so short but i think you should wait until more comes to you and add ...
Apr 3, 2007 -
Re: Heartbreak Doorway
I lie there vacantly upon my bed, Eyes still bloodshot, Fogged and bright red. Mahogony frame and curled head board, How can such a place ever have been graced by ...
Apr 3, 2007 -
Re: August Rain
I really enjoyed this poem, very nice imagery and nice descriptions. She stood alone, silent in the ruins of her own surrender; I really like that line in the ruins ...
Apr 3, 2007 -
Re: The sad end
Brilliant effort and i like your imagary alot, Also the descriptions were very good and very accurate for such a situation to be real. I would say pay no mind ...
Apr 3, 2007 -
Re: Engulfed
I really enjoyed this piece it definatly captures the imagination and i felt like i was holding my breath during your descriptions of underwater and it was very sweet how ...
Apr 2, 2007 -
Re: First Post
I really like these two pieces, the second one is probably my favourite but seriously you should post more on this site because i really enjoyed reading your kind of ...
Apr 2, 2007 -
Re: Narrow Minded
Tick tick bang, read the warning signs. The makers of wooden legs also make land mines. The finers they will fine you if you dont pay your fines, while the ...
Apr 2, 2007 -
Re: Yours Sweet Sounds
Yeah i usually skip over puntuation and capatilizing bad
Apr 1, 2007
