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Re: Treacherous Waters
"Cap'n, she's goin' down." "Rothschild, me hearty lieutenant, aft everythin' I done, I ain't losin' me ship. Ye give these scurvy-infested swabs a taste o' the cat if ye've got ...
Apr 4, 2008 -
Re: Amaranth
[pre]There the child stands, her dress of lavender reaching only to scraped knees. Cleome crowns her gold-brown hair, woven by the stems. An assorted bouquet she clutches in both hands, ...
Feb 29, 2008 -
Re: Melting a Midwest Winter
I'm not sure about this one... You don't seem to have much consistency between your stanzas. The reins of reason may have slipped Momentarily from my grip. I wasn't worried, ...
Feb 25, 2008 -
Re: A poem for you
[pre]Since we met, almost two years ago, you've been sculpting away, at the marble of my heart. Like the earth, it will be permanent, and become the legacy. Like the ...
Feb 21, 2008 -
Re: The Hero's Violet
I noticed that you used the word Amaranth. I find this intruiging because when you describe the flower in other parts of the poem, you are describing it as if ...
Feb 20, 2008 -
Re: Every Holiday is Halloween
[pre]Come time to wrap the presents, Christmas, Valentines, birthdays, anniversaries, people have tendencies they normally don't. They put on the masks of generosity and happiness, while they delve de
Feb 20, 2008 -
Re: Valentine
This is adorable! I wish I got poems for Valentine's Day. :P Even though I don't do the whole commercial part of Valentine's Day. Your phrases flow from one to ...
Feb 20, 2008 -
Re: Night Nerves
You are a young writer, but everyone under the age of 25 is too, hence the name of this site. Your poem is simple, which isn't a bad thing, but ...
Feb 20, 2008 -
Re: The Girl I Met Today
Beautiful things Happen to beautiful girls, She is the girl I met today. The last line in this stanza doesn't flow with the first two lines, although I can see ...
Feb 20, 2008 -
Re: Kidnapped
Short and sweet but it really brings home the reality of how easy it is for a child to go missing. I liked it, but I would change the word ...
Feb 20, 2008 -
Re: The Dreamer's Reality
You have a lot of good imagery here, consistancy linking it together much the way an old book is held together with thread or stitching. Very well done. My eye ...
Feb 20, 2008 -
Re: Feathers
Haha, it's cute. You might want to consider capitalizing to make it stand out more and make it appear to be more complete as opposed to unfinished. Maybe a period ...
Feb 20, 2008 -
Re: Seasons
No, you didn't hurt my feelings. :lol: If I never got criticism, I'd never do better.
Feb 20, 2008 -
Re: Seasons
Thanks, for those who liked it. And thanks for those who didn't. I know it's not the best Haiku and it's relatively unoriginal, not to mention simple and could be ...
Feb 19, 2008 -
Re: Colours
Isn't an Amaranth purple? I wrote a poem about the word, if I'm wrong about the shade the whole poem can... just be incinerated. I looked it up on dictionary.com, ...
Feb 11, 2008
