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OF COURSE a story about teens living on the streets gets my attention! The concept could go anywhere. Just a few problems to add... Carter Adams, an unwanted teen of ...

I don't think you should give up on the story! If you work through it, it has potential. And I disagree with the ten year old not knowing about an ...

Wow! This story is absurd. In a good way! It kept me reading, the fact that she overreacts so much over endings. And I thought the beginning was VERY amusing... ...

This is a good start! Instead of "Story of the Unnamed", how about just "The Unnamed" for the title? Sounds more classy. :wink: I, am a homo sapiens are a ...

:shock: Wow, this is very well written! The language is so concise and mature. Way to go! You do use Captain Bear's name a lot, some pronouns are needed. Maybe ...

This story is very interesting. I find myself really liking the main character, and what's going on in her mind. I can't wait to see more. Except I think some ...

You have a nice, steady writing style. Good story, so far. At the beginning though, I think you should indicate right away that it is a shaving razor in question. ...

A very interesting story. I love the loop of it. The storyline is slightly confusing in the paragraphs in the end - or maybe that's just me. [s]now[/s] since we ...

Very interesting! I love his sneering attitude, it really draws my attention and makes me want to see where it came from. A story about a place of outcasted fantasy ...

Normalcy is a real word, for the person who said that, haha. It was made up by some American President but it caught on. So feel free to use it. ...

I find this really amusing! It's original and funny, and I am a sucker for Christian mythology turned into fantasy story. It definitely catches the attention when the first line ...