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  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Breaking

    Hello-- I really like this poem, because it's so succinct and reflects something that is a problem/concern for many people. A lot of people who do have something wrong going ...

    Feb 8, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Our Own Private Betrayal

    This is such an awesome little poem, Connie. I like short poems because they're quick to memorize and then you can remember them easily at times when you might need ...

    Feb 8, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: snow falling on cedars

    Hey you - oh my god, I know, I'm reviewing, isn't this nuts?! chimes of ice hang from the saplings like bells attached to gypsy ankles, cold, and clear-voiced as ...

    Feb 8, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: This Body has No Soul

    Hey Write! --- Since the day you left, everything I tried to forget, An order of the mind, An unaccomplished task by the broken heart This part seems incomplete. You ...

    Sep 16, 2009
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: I Stand Up

    Ayumi-- I enjoy this poem, mainly because I think the final line is so simple and sweet. I have only one qualm I would like to point out though: I ...

    Sep 3, 2009
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: Armageddon

    Hey lkay06! I will be your reviewer today. :) --- [BEFORE THIS SEGMENT: I'm a little confused as to what you mean by "this segment". Can you perhaps clarify? It's ...

    Sep 1, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: Angler Part I

    Hey Ryanx! You may be wondering, "Why has no one reviewed this?!" The answer is simple: on this site, we have a rule that you must review at least two ...

    Sep 1, 2009
  • Short Story » Action / Adventure, General Re: The Manio Family

    Hey Leoni! This is quite long, but I feel ready to tackle it. ;) --- NITPICKS The black fug of a night in Soorey Island Typo here. his fingers tracing ...

    Sep 1, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: An Iron Sea pt. 2

    Sir Conrad! The unfortunate hypothermia gal, her name is Denise Patterson? And Claireborne's assistant's name is Hallie Natterson? Haha. Sorry, I'm focusing a bit too much on names, but did ...

    Aug 1, 2009
  • Novel / Chapter » General, General Re: An Iron Sea pt. 1

    My good sir! I am quite late with this, but me and internet haven't really been all that adhesive to each other lately, and you know this. Since you've already ...

    Aug 1, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Free

    Ms. Antigone Cadmus Haruno Sakura... I am here to review. :) --- Her footsteps pit pat throughout the walls, bouncing off the stalactites and into her pounding eardrum. "Throughout" seems ...

    Jun 18, 2009
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: All Mine

    Hola GreatEscape! --- I did not have to look at my husband beside me to know that he was staring also. Also looks odd at the end of the sentence ...

    Jun 17, 2009
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Hailey's story

    Peanutpeanutpeanut, lucky you were in chat so I could spot this need of a story review! ^_^ --- I stood still as a statue. My nose pressed against the cold, ...

    Jun 12, 2009
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General Re: Preserved

    Hey Elijah! How do you do? --- What's going on in this story seems very interesting. The style it is written in, however, is extremely choppy and this is extremely ...

    Jun 11, 2009
  • Short Story » Historical Fiction, General Re: Ramree

    Conrad, the devilish speed writer. Well, hey, at least you have one killer beefy profile of short stories. --- Hell is noise. It is a cacaphony of vicious sounds, the ...

    Jun 10, 2009


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