Claeren

Thanks you guys! I included all your critiques in my finished essay, it was a lot better! *beams at everyone* - Claeren

Hey, thanks! *beaming*

awesome...

I'll give you a sneak peak. The forgotten tales are actually what the MC is dreaming about. She's dreaming that she herself is part of the forgotten Tales. weird huh?

That was kind of how it was suppose to look. Also you're probably right when you say it's short. It has to be 500 words...*cries like a baby* *Stomps off ...

One last thing that I forgot to mention, though: When you mean the difference between "showing" instead of "telling" you mean the difference between me actually doing the action istead ...

Wow...thanks, I see what's wrong with my writing now. Unfortunately, I have a real problem writing short sentences, since there's just so much that I want to tell, and I ...

What do you mean when you say "showing instead of telling"?