Claeren

This is an essay that I had to do for a history fair. please read and review, because I haven't turned it in yet, and I want to make it ...

Okay, here's the edited version of my first draft as well as the first part of the second chapter. Hope you enjoy! :wink: The Intro Dear reader, This is a ...

These are all really good! The same mistake happens in all of them, and that's the rhythm, but it's still pretty good. Also the story is great as well, but ...

This is very good. Just a few corrections in bold: I'm waiting... I'm... this doesn't really make much sense to me when you put these periods here. At least it ...

This is a really excellent piece. The only mistake that I could see was this one: “This plan must not fail, Despian. I will brake the habit this world has ...

This is really good! I've put some corrections in bold: The History Textbook I was coming home from school one day, Passing the park where the children play. Listening to ...

One last thing that I forgot to mention, though: When you mean the difference between "showing" instead of "telling" you mean the difference between me actually doing the action istead ...

Wow...thanks, I see what's wrong with my writing now. Unfortunately, I have a real problem writing short sentences, since there's just so much that I want to tell, and I ...

What do you mean when you say "showing instead of telling"?

Hey my name's Claeren (say it with me: Clare - oo - en. Got it? If not, say it again: Clare - oo - en. See?), or rather, that's my ...

Journal of a Secret Keeper Chapter 1 - The Intro The story of my life is not one that I can say is very exciting. That’s pretty obvious since I ...

This is a really well written piece and since I'm in a good mood, I'll tell it to you as it is: 1. Where's the rhythm? I couldn't get the ...

This was awesome. You somehow managed to take what could have been a child's poem and make it into a captivating, intricately told, poem written seemingly by an adult. I ...